Discarded Without Hopes

Seven days has passed:
I can remember the days I felt useful
Dangling from your shoulders
Spreading warmth through your being
As you, clutch me on a brisk day
I frame you with passion and love
Hugging your jugular closely
As my colleagues worked with me
Giving heat to your consciousness
And comfort to your extremities

Fourteen days has passed:
Resting amongst the wilderness
I weep of knowing, I will never be whole again
This harsh land transformed my exterior
The foliage has camouflaged me
Disguising my outer layer
I have a dirty disposed feel now
Nevertheless, I lay here effortless to move
If you were looking
I am hidden quite well

Twenty-one days has passed:
Can anyone hear the sighs of my loneliness?
I have been with nature far too long
I feel like one of the druids of the earth
Someone please help me, I shriek with emotion
Find me, clean me, and convert me back
To glorious attire with purpose
Giving contentment to one without
I cry for the acceptance and approval
Locate my everything please

Thirty days has passed:
Damn you, you senseless bastard
Abandoning me with despair
I was not useful or useless
My craving was to embrace you
Secure your inner layer
However, you forgot me entirely
Mindlessly tossing me aside
Not putting forth the effort to inquire my whereabouts
Here I lay discarded without hopes

© 2012

Perfect Poet Award Week 60

I’m happy to accept the perfect poetry award for week 60, and I nominate Ankoku Hikaru

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29 Comments

Filed under Dreams, Honesty, Loneliness, Love, Pain, Passion, Poetry, Powerful

29 responses to “Discarded Without Hopes

  1. Very moving… The feelings of loneliness and neglect accompany your words, and oh how I know them far too well. Great job!

  2. Hello.
    WoW! I felt like I was hanging on your every word.
    Powerful ending.
    Very nicely done!
    Thanks for sharing & visiting. I appreciate your comment.

    Congratulations too on your award!

    Harp Of My Soul

  3. *sigh* I know these feelings well, and you manage to create something beautiful out of them. Well done.

  4. What a metamorphosis takes place over time. I feel the mild anxiety to lonliness to anger. Well done!

  5. Cool. The progression flows nicely and I’m always of fan of personifying some simple object while creating layers that pinpoint accurate human emotions and thought. Very cool, indeed.

  6. The transition of the four stanzas, using the passing of days, was brilliant. Also how with the passing of time one event can lead to a series of emotions. Very powerful poetry. I wish you strength to stand up, brush off the foliage, and show that “bastard” what a fool they were.

  7. Powerful and poignant. Well done ~~

  8. I loved it so much. Nice write.

  9. I could relate to those feelings when things get neglected over time and how we start to take things for granted. Excellent accompanying picture – depicting desolation.

  10. Your words move me, what can I say, I loved it so many emotions on display here.

  11. Very nicely done. Haunting is the word that comes to mind! Good work 🙂

  12. Wow! What an emotional poem. It’s sad, but also I sense a bit of hope for better times.
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  13. Really like this. It’s quite a tapestry. I am wondering why you worked in seven days and then for the last stanza it’s suddenly 9 days, not 7. Is there any reason for this?

    • I liked to add a little mystery, because when it is read you count as you did and you instinctively fill in the blank and adding by 7. Breaking the up the number sequence allow more depth.

  14. I love how this poem progressed… it’s so beautiful… and so sad! It literally made me want to hug my scarf, haha!

  15. You are a mighty presence. Your writing is powerful. I wish you well. You will come through this and do just fine.

  16. Love, love, love this! Great job!

  17. Very interesting, and slightly disturbing – which is a good thing. Any writing that gets me thinking is a good thing. Thanks so much for sharing it.

  18. Wow, wow, and more wow! What a roller coaster ride of emotion that was!!! Great job. Blessings, Terri

  19. i agree with everyone else, i know these feelings 😦

    the earth

  20. my lord! you are brilliant!!!! I am in LOVE with your style! raw and honest. I am following!!!!!!!!!! Nice work and cannot wait to read more from you!!!

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  21. happy and sad moments combined, they are powerful when you are the one experiencing this…

    the ending leaves me feeling heart breaking, excellent piece.
    Happy Rally.

  22. I can feel the deep emotion in this one. Frustration and feelings of unworthiness as you realized you weren’t valued. It seems like loyalty means nothing these days…so sorry.

  23. This was SO good! Really impressive… but more than that it spoke for my own emotions… it was so relevant to what I feel right now… I have this post from last year sometime that is titled “Who’s counting any way” … it’s been this long and I feel like I am still counting… sigh. The last post on my blog is a re-post from a few months ago but it is how I feel today… your last lines spoke to me…. not sure if this is just a write for you or if this is your soul writing truth;) whatever it is – I feel in love with it!
    🙂
    ~L

    • Thank you so very much. You are a beautiful writer as well. I was inspired to write this from taking a picture of a scarf on the side of the road as I was walking to the store. But the depth came from being layoff after giving everything to a company that discarded me. It was the leftover anguish after comparing the two.

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